My vague guesses are that queen of diamonds could be Jade Allen and the king of clubs could be Mithras or some other equally doomy npc. no idea who the little silver or the little black figure is. The joker I'm guessing is Jamie.
It's a very cool piece, and stuck at the beginning of a longer story that slowly made clear who the pieces and the players were it would be perfect. But as it is, it's simply bemusing and unsatisfying because it gives so little away without any resolution. No one likes an impossible puzzle!
Might I suggest further descriptions of the figures or further discussion about the pieces and what they have done in previous turns of play. That way the reader gets more clues, the story is fleshed out a little more but you can still remain vague and have it as a guessing game...
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Date: 2007-12-18 11:11 am (UTC)It's a very cool piece, and stuck at the beginning of a longer story that slowly made clear who the pieces and the players were it would be perfect. But as it is, it's simply bemusing and unsatisfying because it gives so little away without any resolution. No one likes an impossible puzzle!
Might I suggest further descriptions of the figures or further discussion about the pieces and what they have done in previous turns of play. That way the reader gets more clues, the story is fleshed out a little more but you can still remain vague and have it as a guessing game...